Bob,
Here are a few more suggestions.
3rd bar has a Bb in the melody. I can't get the Db to sound right, unless it is a novelty song. A couple minor suggestions for chords in that bar as well.
I think that changing with gusto on first and third beats is best. Example: Am to Am/G.
The turnaround in the eighth bar is a bit corny but I think works with so many chord changes in general. Also solidifies the key (for awhile).
Not exactly sure why the Ab works in bar 13 but I guess because it is a circle of fourths with the following Eb. Chromatic sections change the rules.
The Gb7 in bar 14 reinforces a momentary move to the key of Eb. Gb7 is just a C7 with the 3rd and 7th reversed so it pushes towards the key of Eb.
I think the DC al Coda bar works well with a G7sus/D followed by a G7+. I like the tension.
The coda is interesting. It has a feeling of Satchmo singing It's a Wonderful World. Where in the world did you get the last two bars? Would require really special words for those chords.
Do you have any idea of what the song should be about? Love song? Philosophical "isn't this great" song? Nonesense but provocative? Topical? Standard for the ages?
Do you really like this one or is it just something you had laying around?
Great to have this conversation.
Jim
Here are a few more suggestions.
3rd bar has a Bb in the melody. I can't get the Db to sound right, unless it is a novelty song. A couple minor suggestions for chords in that bar as well.
I think that changing with gusto on first and third beats is best. Example: Am to Am/G.
The turnaround in the eighth bar is a bit corny but I think works with so many chord changes in general. Also solidifies the key (for awhile).
Not exactly sure why the Ab works in bar 13 but I guess because it is a circle of fourths with the following Eb. Chromatic sections change the rules.
The Gb7 in bar 14 reinforces a momentary move to the key of Eb. Gb7 is just a C7 with the 3rd and 7th reversed so it pushes towards the key of Eb.
I think the DC al Coda bar works well with a G7sus/D followed by a G7+. I like the tension.
The coda is interesting. It has a feeling of Satchmo singing It's a Wonderful World. Where in the world did you get the last two bars? Would require really special words for those chords.
Do you have any idea of what the song should be about? Love song? Philosophical "isn't this great" song? Nonesense but provocative? Topical? Standard for the ages?
Do you really like this one or is it just something you had laying around?
Great to have this conversation.
Jim
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