Bob,
Cute song. Nice job on the lyrics.
If I can make any suggestions I will send them to you.
I'm not sure about some of the non-rhyming parts -- I was waiting for a rhyme and didn't get one a few times.
"Look down his throat there's the seat of his pants and he .." Is this a pun on a dog panting? Sort of?
Or is it the seat of a bad guys pants? Could go either way.
So, the song says:
Dogs have a carefree life being driven around with their heads out the window sniffing everything. Great nose and ears, but otherwise limited. The carefree dog is also the law breaker's worst enemy. Dogs will take you down if you have not figured out how to live right. Don't blame the dogs for helping to put you away.
I still have a little trouble singing the tune. I'll work on that. I can play all the chords at speed and it sounds pretty good.
I really hadn't figured out exactly what the subject matter of my words would be. But fitting something special in the 7th bar is important because it sounds a little out of place since it goes back to C instead of Eb, the way it is set up in the 6th bar. After the C7 you expect F7 Bb7 Eb, like it is in 15-16.
Actually, from 4th bar we are possibly already in Eb because Fmin7 is the min 2nd chord of Eb, going to Bb7 (dominant) in the 5th bar and then Eb (7) in the 6th bar.
I'm not exactly sure why the 5th bar works. I think you put the F7 in there. I guess when you are doing chromatic passages a lot of things work. The chords just follow a descending pattern along with the melody, sort of.
In fact, the more I look at it, the progression is pretty much based on a descending bass line until it gets to the happy bridge and philosophical coda. The E7 in bar 4 works because it keeps the descending line going and then springs to its tritone substitute brother, Bb7, which is trying to get us to resolve to Eb. You remember tritone subs, right? The 7th and 3rd switch places in E7 and Bb7.
As you can see, I love to understand why songs and progressions work or don't work. This one has some interesting quirks to it.
You might try a E7b9 in the 18th bar and a D7b9 in the 19th. F#9 sounds good in 21 and a G7sus4/D sounds ok in the first part of 24. But those are all just interesting colors.
I still use the guitar to try out everything because I can play all these variations pretty easily. It is obvious when something works or not.
This has been fun. Let's do more of it. When we get situated up north we will need to get together.
Would you like to hear the guitar version of your song?
Jim
Cute song. Nice job on the lyrics.
If I can make any suggestions I will send them to you.
I'm not sure about some of the non-rhyming parts -- I was waiting for a rhyme and didn't get one a few times.
"Look down his throat there's the seat of his pants and he .." Is this a pun on a dog panting? Sort of?
Or is it the seat of a bad guys pants? Could go either way.
So, the song says:
Dogs have a carefree life being driven around with their heads out the window sniffing everything. Great nose and ears, but otherwise limited. The carefree dog is also the law breaker's worst enemy. Dogs will take you down if you have not figured out how to live right. Don't blame the dogs for helping to put you away.
I still have a little trouble singing the tune. I'll work on that. I can play all the chords at speed and it sounds pretty good.
I really hadn't figured out exactly what the subject matter of my words would be. But fitting something special in the 7th bar is important because it sounds a little out of place since it goes back to C instead of Eb, the way it is set up in the 6th bar. After the C7 you expect F7 Bb7 Eb, like it is in 15-16.
Actually, from 4th bar we are possibly already in Eb because Fmin7 is the min 2nd chord of Eb, going to Bb7 (dominant) in the 5th bar and then Eb (7) in the 6th bar.
I'm not exactly sure why the 5th bar works. I think you put the F7 in there. I guess when you are doing chromatic passages a lot of things work. The chords just follow a descending pattern along with the melody, sort of.
In fact, the more I look at it, the progression is pretty much based on a descending bass line until it gets to the happy bridge and philosophical coda. The E7 in bar 4 works because it keeps the descending line going and then springs to its tritone substitute brother, Bb7, which is trying to get us to resolve to Eb. You remember tritone subs, right? The 7th and 3rd switch places in E7 and Bb7.
As you can see, I love to understand why songs and progressions work or don't work. This one has some interesting quirks to it.
You might try a E7b9 in the 18th bar and a D7b9 in the 19th. F#9 sounds good in 21 and a G7sus4/D sounds ok in the first part of 24. But those are all just interesting colors.
I still use the guitar to try out everything because I can play all these variations pretty easily. It is obvious when something works or not.
This has been fun. Let's do more of it. When we get situated up north we will need to get together.
Would you like to hear the guitar version of your song?
Jim
